The description of the lag-time places deeply touched me. The develop of technology and Internet are so fast, and the rise of the metropolis and its bright appearance always make people yearn for it. But on the edge of the city, in those gray areas, people have advanced technology, but not the basic living and social security to go with it, thus forming the chaos of “forgotten cities”.
The growth of cybercity scares me. If human has advanced technology but the social structure breaks down, then we are likely to inevitably enter the future of cyberpunk. Powerful corporations take control and small individuals lose their dignity. I don’t want to see such a future, but just in the current network environment, the problem of network violence and personal information disclosure has been very serious. Cities should provide more security to their residents.
–Yi CHEH, 3035638703
I can associate well with your anxiety about the future, so to say. The rapid development of technology, particularly information technology, is somewhat concerning. To better narrate your argument, you could try to focus on this concern and build it up through several critical questions. For example, after starting with what is “lag-time” places, you can press toward the inevitable technological advancement. What aspects of this upgrade that benefit or damage society? You were implying that the technology development in the city centre was also causing some sort of inequality. How has technology affected our social lives? Does it have anything to do with the “forgotten cities” you mentioned in the first paragraph? Leading your readers through these questions would be helpful to grasp a better understanding of both your argument and logic of inquiry.