Your ordinary textual narration comes across strongly as a video diary. What particular issue are you highlighting in your documentary? If it is ordinary, then what is extraordinary for the point of a documentary?
The film is organized linearly. Was it intentional to start the day at 10am and end at 1am? Every aspect of the ordinary must be thought. Why should the ordinary of this enclosure situation during the pandemic the same as that of a non-enclosure situation?
Look at the works of Fruit Chan and Tsai Ming Liang, the dramatization. What is the point of showcasing your point of ordinariness? Is there spectacular in your ordinariness, to highlight ordinariness? What are you commenting on? How do you think your visual design, your text, your narration, change of colors are thinking through these issues? You can use mundane things to challenge power structures and the demands put on you, e.g. being late, not following the traffic light. Look at Certeau’s works.
Your ordinary textual narration comes across strongly as a video diary. What particular issue are you highlighting in your documentary? If it is ordinary, then what is extraordinary for the point of a documentary?
The film is organized linearly. Was it intentional to start the day at 10am and end at 1am? Every aspect of the ordinary must be thought. Why should the ordinary of this enclosure situation during the pandemic the same as that of a non-enclosure situation?
Look at the works of Fruit Chan and Tsai Ming Liang, the dramatization. What is the point of showcasing your point of ordinariness? Is there spectacular in your ordinariness, to highlight ordinariness? What are you commenting on? How do you think your visual design, your text, your narration, change of colors are thinking through these issues? You can use mundane things to challenge power structures and the demands put on you, e.g. being late, not following the traffic light. Look at Certeau’s works.