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I think the contents can add more in this video. Also, at the last part of the video, there are too many words. It is imposable to finish reading such a large amount of words in a very short time. And I think every scene is spend too long time. For example, from 0:00-0:46, it is a scene that a person wake up. It spends the video one third of time. It is hard to show the topic of this video. There are only 5 scenes. About the part that shows the faucet, it may good to more focus on the water drop. All in all, the contents are too little.
Hi Audrey. Speaking of the overall content, I think it matches the theme Solitude well. There is no dialogue or human interaction at all. This brings out the loneliness of people nowadays, especially in this pandemic. The narrative of the essay is so realistic that I can imagine how boring and predictable this kind of lifestyle is. This reminds me of the banal photography. However, I think you can add thoughts about this kind of lifestyle as on-screen text or whatsoever. Anyway, good job!
In my opinion, the content of each scene is not very clear, there are around 5 scene, which is on bad, water tap, tv, sky and computer. I cannot really get the link of each scene, but maybe the lonely during the disease? The scene at the begin, I think it is better to add some music on it, which can easier to construct a sad mood/environment. Overall, I like the water tap part, it did a great job.
I think the way you record the video really could a sense of resting in the COVID-19, The choice of screens are also very good as well, especially for the water tap screen, it gives the sense of suspension and termination. However, I think on screen text could be added to let the audience for better understanding. Secondly, the screens were a bit too long like the first screen, nothing is moving and seems like a still image. To sum up, the text at the end let audience know your thoughts yet more screen could be added. Nice video??
As a documentary that explores the inactive lifestyle brought about by the pandemic, appreciate your efforts in portraying this in a realistic manner that somewhat relates to your title. The opening contains so much potential but the rest is rather disappointing. This work has potential to be developed further and the camera/editing techniques could likewise be enhanced and exaggerated to emphasize your thesis of solitude! Considering the title of this work, what can we learn about this state of “loneliness,” “isolation,” or “seclusion”? This is a universal sentiment and has been clearly intensified by the pandemic. However, why are you selecting this as a thesis topic, and what issue about it do you want to raise? (e.g. human relationship, awareness of space, etc.)
If the emphasis here is to contrast the din of the city (external) and the silence of the home (internal), this idea should be taken seriously and choreographed better with more experimentation of camera and editing techniques. Perhaps, how would you present the sound of 24 hours into 2.5 minutes? Consider what scenes you are filming and why you intend to show them. Ask yourself how they add to the overall narration. Currently, the five key scenes each contain a range of urban noises, but how are you considering the relationship of both spaces (internal vs. external)? What do you wish to highlight when overlaying traffic noise with the dripping tap? Firstly understanding your own decision is important. From this, we can then begin to reflect on the position/thesis of isolation.
Lastly, your references and written statement are missing.